She woke up feeling tired and unease, like being asleep for so long. She knew something has changed in her as she delicately touch her face down to her shoulders, arms, belly and legs down to her toes. She studied all of her parts, but none was missing. She was complete but more. She knew something changed, she reckoned that the event from the night before was responsible for this very odd feeling.
Did everything just happen last night?
She whispered to herself as she peered around the strange vastness of the room she’s in. The size of it made her feel small that paradoxically almost asphyxiated her whole system. And there’s no one there. Not even a single soul nor something that could possibly make a sound apart from the heaviness of her breathing. Nothing else was there except from the Japanese full sized bed with dark blue shiny sheets that was too troubling to look at. Fear instantly grasped her heart, but she ignored it.
She stood up and gently closed her eyes while her hands converge with the pure black walls as she danced her way slowly through the four corners of her cage. Yes, she’s caged. That’s what she felt as she was sensing the texture and the life of the wide walls of her room. She then opened her eyes as she finished the tour, eyes that spoke of wrath and agony for the many questions in her mind that baffles her.
She’s 100% sure this wasn’t where she was tortured. This room is entirely different. As she reached the door, the only way to escape since there are no windows, she squeezed the knob to the right that produced such a frightening click that echoed inside the room for what seemed like eternity––a click that shouts of being locked there forever. The domino effect of it stayed in her head that made her fall onto her knees and with her trembling hands she tightly held and pulled the strands of her hair from her scalp like a mad woman lost in her own world. The fire in her eyes saw nothing but chaos. The fear she tried to ignore kicked in once again, and this time it was much larger than the first one.
She blinked and then a single line of tear from her left eye disturbed the tension in her cheek. And without holding back, she screamed at the top of her lungs to let go of the anxiety that strangles her soul.
“Arrrrrrgggghhhhhhh!” A loud vibrating growl like a lioness in an empty jungle, hungry for answers, enraged by the silence that was ironically deafening. With the extreme intensity of her scream, she watched the black concrete walls break with monstrous veins of crack like how an earthquake would do to a strong surface.
The crack continued to grow like it’s about to break the cage she’s in. She then grinned wildly not only because freedom is about to be granted to her, but most importantly because she knew she could do astonishing things she has never done before. And it stimulated her thoughts, to seek for the rest of the missing magnificent pieces that will complete the puzzle. She felt it in her bones that there’s more of her that she will soon be able to unleash.
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Read the first part here.
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HOLY MOLY Apple! This is an incredible scene! You are about to unleash the beast here! Like a hungry lioness, I can feel this character is about to devour us all. Akira needs some of this raw power!!! Great writing!
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Thank you George. The holy moly just made my day hihi. Trying to create another character that will challenge the Psychoweirdo. 😌
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So far I love her ferociousness….
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Girl, you are talented.
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And so are you! Thanks a lot, my dear 🤩♥️
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Profound 😊
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Thank youuuu 😘🤩
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❤️
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Well, very “ready for the book” text 👍👍💕💕
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You think so? Hmm. I was thinking of combining the forces of this girl (whose name I have to ponder about while meditating lol) and the Psychoweirdo. What do you think? I need your expert advice hehe
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I can’t say anything about the plot. Bcz it’s ur call – the plot. But the writing is really good.
About the character: it should be mix of 2 I believe ✌️😅
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Awesome! thanks for the insights, Ray! 🙂
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💙💙
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Sorry if lots mistake s I’m walking with dogs
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It’s alright no worries 😉
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And I’m not an expert in such texts. I mean I never write this kind of descriptions. U probably should ask Hyperion, but he is too kind. I’m not so kind. Lol 😂
U already have “a good writing style” in u. Focus on hero & plot. As an episode from the book – it’s great. But what’s the story? :))
That’s all I can to say.
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Haha aren’t you kind? Naaah. You’re one of the nicest and sweetest writer I have met in WP. And yes I would also ask George and Hyp’s advice. The story will soon be revealed in the next chapters hehe
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I don’t know…not the same kind of kindness tho. I hope we r different, me, Hyperion and George 😂😂😫😱
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Haha love your emojis! So you! Soooo Ray! I couldn’t use emojis right now cos I’m using my laptop eh idk where to find them haha
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No problems 😉☕️✌️🍫🥤next time 🤓
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It’s already forming up to be interesting, so seeing it try to rival psychoweirdo will make for something really good, I’m sure.
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Good insight. Thank you, Lucas!
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Excellent.😍
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Thank you Ortensia. Your comments mean a lot to me 🙂
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My pleasure dear.you are talented❤️
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Sweet! Thank you again 🤩
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I love the image you used to go with the story. It fits perfectly. I could rave on about all the things I read from the woman’s expression but it’s your story that gives the image of the woman’s emotional state life and energy. I do feel the transformation from pain, fear, and confusion to a determination to live and the growing power loosing the bonds that were forced on her. I see her dance and sense her surroundings and find the exit. When her path is blocked, she creates her own path to freedom. I feel you can go in any direction from here. The story can stay in the darkness or come to the light and in either case, it portrays a magnificent struggle with one’s fear and pain to find their way through what has been forced on them to accept. I also feel the sensual mixed with pain. It is the altar at which love worships. What liberates us can also enslave us. What lifts us over mountains of ecstasy can leave us stranded in the valley of agony. The difference, only our hearts can tell. Beautiful and frightening, a work of art.
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Thanks for your in depth appreciation and analysis of this story, Hyp. This girl somehow has the same destiny as Alexandra Dragana’s, a kind of calling she hasn’t figured out yet and if you don’t mind, I might borrow Alexandra’s line asking Dari, “Why me, of all people, why me?” once she found out the evil behind this and why she was tortured and granted some abilities she will soon discover. This story of pain and pleasure has something to do with my real emotions, so it means a lot to me when great artists like you take time to read and like it. Thank you so much!
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It’s always my pleasure to read you, Apple. You are a rising star in your own riveting style. Please feel free to use anything you like. If it’s helpful to you then I’m thrilled if you use it. I think the emotion and feelings you invest in your story definitely shows in the many layers and views you give us. And for you, I hope it returns your pleasure.
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You’re so kind, Hyp! Thank you so much 😊
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I speak truth always and I am at your literary disposal should you ever require it. ⚜️😌
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hahahahaha dahil dito mag aaral nako ng matino sa english talaga. hahahahahaha
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Hahahaha talaga to oh. Bakit pala parang nagiba na name ng blog mo, bat Metanoia na? Hehe
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Magnificent!
An explosive array of lioness power caged and what it takes to unleash the beast within.
Very well done, Apple. 👍
You are indeed an extremely talented writer with great powers of description.
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Thank you so much, Dracul. I’m touched. Thanks for the compliments ♥️
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Oh my God !!!!! Apple …. no words
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Eniiiiii!!! Thank youuuu 🙂 I hope thats a good thing lol
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Now she’s playing with power!! A beast in a lady and a lady in a cage, not gonna end well😁. I love how you are just giving the readers a play by play of her surging powers, the description is amazing Apple, it builds character and makes us relate to the character, great job!! A wonderful fly from part one!!😁
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